Oddly enough, I think that if you repeated this "idea" now, you'd do it with a more deft & light touch because of the wit in your "mature " works.... and the script would then be more a more fluid thing.
(I sent you a message about the posted image itself but as to your comment about the book) - I would hope to think that as I get older I get more adept at expressing myself. Interestingly this is this book would never happen now as I do not even remember who I was back then. I just know it was needed. One of the reason I like making books is that you know when you are done. You make your selections, you finalize your edit, you bind it and it is closed. I had, for a very long time, a habit of re-visiting the past, returning to old ideas to try to make things right and it hamstrung me for moving on so I started to bind. I do wonder what I would have done differently from time to time but knowing myself as I do I made certain that is not an option. But you are not at all wrong.